What do you think of my excerpt?

it is very very good. the only thing that i would consider giving you advice wise is that the first few lines sound like you are trying to hard to be descriptive. and i know it is hard to not sound like that and not sound boring at the same time. But other then that i think that you should keep writing and you should finish the story. from the sounds of it the story has a great bordering line and a nice set up for the ending. unless that was the ending. and if it was i think that you should end it positive. you are talented and i think that you should continue writing.....you could make a very large living.